One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Medical care has focused by many doctors and scientists in recent years to improve human health and lengthen our life expectancy. While some people criticise this development, I totally agree with the idea that its benefits outweigh drawbacks.

First of all, there is no doubt that lengthening life expectancy means that people have more opportunities to enjoy their life and pursue their dreams. Indeed, many people had spent all their whole life to earn living but they died before coming in for their fortune. Moreover, some babies were born in families where both parents are middle-aged . Therefore, these parents find it necessary to live longer in order that they can educate and bring up their children.

Besides, I believe that no one want to face the division. Death is sadness, in most of the situations. No daughter, no son, no grandchild feel alright when their grandparents, or even parents die. In other word, as a child, I think everyone hope that they have ability to give their families all the best and show their respect to the ones who bring up them because of their superb efforts.

In conclusion, although improving medical care causes disadvantages, I still agree with the point of view supporting its bigger advantages. However, it is crucial for human to have more children and governments should encourage immigration to increase the number of younger adults so as not to dealing with the aging population.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, while, i think, in conclusion, no doubt, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1206.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 238.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06722689076 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66620123971 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.663865546218 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 367.2 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2306925863 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.5 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4166666667 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169217075054 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568059464156 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472441142167 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0995941555321 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534930074136 0.056905535591 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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