People are living longer than ever before. At the same time, the young population is declining while the number of old people is rising. Will this development be a benefit for the society? What are the advantages and disadvantages of having more old people in the country?
The average human lifecycle is expanded and which is expected to see 100 years. Comparatively, the child birth rate is decreasing whereas the elderly population is increasing. The longevity will be beneficial for the public since people would enjoy more with their family, but the declining the population of youth can be the serious issue and which will result an elderly country. This will create various governmental spending such as pension, retirement, and health care entitlements whereas the more elders in the country can expect of lower crime rates and the possibilities of tighten the family relationships. However, I believe that the taxes and entitlements to support for elders outweigh the advantages.
As the society develops and the relevant fields are developing, the result of those is the longevity. It is common that human’s average lifecycle is up to 100 years and this means the people can enjoy more being with families and friends. Therefore, the longevity can result in more family and friends times.
Due to this longevity, the elderly population is growing in compared to the decreasing of youth population and which will result in elderly countries. If the country is became a full with elders, the amount of government spending will be endless and which means that the governmental budget will be suffering from deficit. Since the old people required many services and entitlements such as pension, retirement and health care, the government may not be able to provide all those entitlement at the end due to the deficit.
However, the more elders in a country can have several advantages. Firstly, there will be lower crime rates. Since elders have lack of ambitions, grudge and energies to commit any crimes, so that the country will have free of crimes. Moreover, the family relationship will be in depth. Since older people have wisdom and life skills, which can be used to handle children and that can enhance the family relationships. Therefore, having elders in a country seems necessary.
Despite all these benefits, in my perspective, the financial burden is more serious than that of benefits. Also, the government deficit account will pressure onto young people in terms of tax and that can result in decrease in childbirth rates. In other words, the governmental financial burden will make the situation the worse. Therefore, it is vital to solve the elderly country issues.
In conclusion, longevity can create the happiness and enjoyable time being with families and friends for a long time as much as 100 years. However, the childbirth rates are decreasing due to the longevity, because the government has pressuring the young people in terms of tax to support the elders.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 170, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...in elderly countries. If the country is became a full with elders, the amount of gover...
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Line 3, column 476, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this entitlement' or 'those entitlements'?
Suggestion: this entitlement; those entitlements
...vernment may not be able to provide all those entitlement at the end due to the deficit. Howeve...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'whereas', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.252016129032 0.247107183377 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.14314516129 0.155533422707 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0987903225806 0.0946595960268 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0322580645161 0.0501214627716 64% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0100806451613 0.0437548338989 23% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.110887096774 0.122226691241 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0342741935484 0.0403226058552 85% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78678205507 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0241935483871 0.0326793684256 74% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.118951612903 0.0861772015684 138% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0443548387097 0.021408717616 207% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0100806451613 0.011925033212 85% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2728.0 1933.35771543 141% => OK
No of words: 443.0 316.048096192 140% => OK
Chars per words: 6.15801354402 6.12580529183 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.20517956788 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.390519187359 0.374742101984 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.286681715576 0.28420135186 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.194130925508 0.203846283523 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.135440180587 0.137316102897 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78678205507 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.037074148 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437923250564 0.56093040696 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.9514748209 60.7387585426 79% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0891783567 143% => OK
Sentence length: 19.2608695652 20.7743622355 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0317265436 49.517814964 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.608695652 127.492653851 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2608695652 20.7743622355 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.608695652174 0.814263465372 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38877755511 137% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 47.9290411228 49.1944974215 97% => OK
Elegance: 2.14130434783 1.69124875643 127% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.529532365119 0.332605444948 159% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.101438600869 0.102741220458 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0693439766825 0.0668466124924 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.571527729021 0.534860350844 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.137776336636 0.148594505496 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.221780594972 0.134430193775 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106193421989 0.0742795772207 143% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.442942079361 0.324371583561 137% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0903214404473 0.0638462369009 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.371790303089 0.228012699653 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832728542929 0.058150111329 143% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.68436873747 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.41683366733 146% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 5.90881763527 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.5751503006 194% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 10.4468937876 182% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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