People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer To what extent do you agree or disagree

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People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

nowadays, the average life expectancy is growing , so it is believed that the retirement age should be raised.In my opinion , this is not reasonable suggestion generally, however , the government take advantage of people for individual purposes.firstly, this essay will discuss a substantial contribution to benefits national prosperity , and secondly express disadvantage.
the principal reason of the government to remain employed longer is that it increases tax revenue ,so it is the key to success in terms of social felicity, also , everyone will be able to accept tasks as a full-fledged manager , as a result ,they do not need to any more new workforce , so it is a mean of save spending times and costs.
on the other hand , the workforce longer has a lot of drawbacks for them ,such as , every one of them that is in middle age or older who has not ample energetic for own daily activities , therefore , some of them will be frail . also in the range of the age everyone should be have fun times and goes on different trips to visit appealing places for rest and relaxation.
In conclusion , I am convinced that raising the retirement age is a must for any country that aims to ensure financial prosperity , but what ought to be priority in long their life? I think physical health of society is vital important.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1087.0 1615.20841683 67% => OK
No of words: 224.0 315.596192385 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85267857143 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95418790611 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 352.8 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.2975951904 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.726047753 49.4020404114 222% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 181.166666667 106.682146367 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.3333333333 20.7667163134 180% => OK
Discourse Markers: 25.1666666667 7.06120827912 356% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.01903807615 458% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134087613736 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052159486793 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04004056455 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0710688545182 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355796573228 0.056905535591 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 11.3001002004 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 9.78957915832 312% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.1190380762 166% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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