People today move to new cities or new countries more than ever before. What challenges do they experience? What strategies are there to meet these challenges?
Modern people are more mobile than in the past. Because of technology many people can receive information from other countries. So that anyone thinks about something different. One of them moves to new city or new country. When people moves to the place more than ever before, so that they will face challenges, both practical and social.
Usually practical challenges will be faced by people moved to another are travel and accommodation. For a person not usually traveling alone that is very difficult to do, but for they are usually stay alone that is something common. For finding the best way to destination many people try to find travel guide. But if they want be save so they must find students association in there. So they will ask everything about the best way to arrive there. For finding accommodation someone must ask people know about the country so that can give best information about the best boarding horse or home stay in there and show direction to find delicious cheap restaurant.
Beside practical challenges someone will face social challenges, such as communication and stress. When someone comes to new country, so they must understanding and fluency with languages in there. One of the way someone easy to face the challenge with prepared the language very well before arrived there. They must get certificate related to the language like IELTS, TOEFL and etc. some one that never separate from family will be difficult to face problem and will get stress in there. One of strategies to face that is find new friends with come to meeting students association and stay in sharing room with somebody will make more closed to another.
There are also social issue beside that like fell loneliness, no family and find new part time job. In order to someone feel better so must join sports club or hobby clubs do that will decrease missing family. Finally in there must find someone or some groups to share about any things.
In conclusion, although there are many challenges in new country because far from home town so that must prepare every think before you arrive in there.
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Essay evaluation report
When people moves to the place
When people move to the place
Usually practical challenges will be faced by people moved to another are travel and accommodation.
Usually practical challenges which will be faced by people who moved to another are travel and accommodation.
but for they are usually stay alone that is something common.
but for those who usually stay alone that is something common.
But if they want be save
But if they want to save
someone must ask people know about the country so that can give best information
someone must ask people who know about the country so that it can give best information
Sentence: When someone comes to new country, so they must understanding and fluency with languages in there.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to must and understanding
Sentence: One of strategies to face that is find new friends with come to meeting students association and stay in sharing room with somebody will make more closed to another.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to is and find
Sentence: Finally in there must find someone or some groups to share about any things.
Description: The token in is not usually followed by an existential there
Suggestion: Refer to in and there
Sentence: In conclusion, although there are many challenges in new country because far from home town so that must prepare every think before you arrive in there.
Description: An article is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to every and think
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 358 350
No. of Characters: 1711 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.35 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.779 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.386 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.589 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.536 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 49, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eople are more mobile than in the past. Because of technology many people can receive i...
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Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ceive information from other countries. So that anyone thinks about something different...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'staid', 'stayed'.
Suggestion: staid; stayed
...fficult to do, but for they are usually stay alone that is something common. For fin...
^^^^
Line 3, column 535, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'give the best'.
Suggestion: give the best
...ople know about the country so that can give best information about the best boarding hor...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 376, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...lated to the language like IELTS, TOEFL and etc. some one that never separate from famil...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 385, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
...the language like IELTS, TOEFL and etc. some one that never separate from family will be...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 86, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...fell loneliness, no family and find new part time job. In order to someone feel better so...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 121, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'feels'.
Suggestion: feels
... new part time job. In order to someone feel better so must join sports club or hobb...
^^^^
Line 7, column 211, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...s do that will decrease missing family. Finally in there must find someone or some grou...
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'if', 'so', 'well', 'in conclusion', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.232558139535 0.247107183377 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.152454780362 0.155533422707 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.093023255814 0.0946595960268 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0723514211886 0.0501214627716 144% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0232558139535 0.0437548338989 53% => OK
Prepositions: 0.131782945736 0.122226691241 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0284237726098 0.0403226058552 70% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.46185118888 2.80594681477 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0439276485788 0.0326793684256 134% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0645994832041 0.0861772015684 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0439276485788 0.021408717616 205% => Try to use less modal verbs (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0077519379845 0.011925033212 65% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2112.0 1933.35771543 109% => OK
No of words: 358.0 316.048096192 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.89944134078 6.12580529183 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.20517956788 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.326815642458 0.374742101984 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.22625698324 0.28420135186 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.134078212291 0.203846283523 66% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0977653631285 0.137316102897 71% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46185118888 2.80594681477 88% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.037074148 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486033519553 0.56093040696 87% => OK
Word variations: 50.8139041858 60.7387585426 84% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0891783567 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0476190476 20.7743622355 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.408009803 49.517814964 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.571428571 127.492653851 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0476190476 20.7743622355 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.380952380952 0.814263465372 47% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.99599198397 225% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 39.6733173716 49.1944974215 81% => OK
Elegance: 1.58333333333 1.69124875643 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29157993319 0.332605444948 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.121231138112 0.102741220458 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.082857394426 0.0668466124924 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.494086828317 0.534860350844 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.15110199954 0.148594505496 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110228597985 0.134430193775 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545024158259 0.0742795772207 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.296802956701 0.324371583561 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0522192093527 0.0638462369009 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192291647615 0.228012699653 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569757320623 0.058150111329 98% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.68436873747 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.41683366733 146% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 5.90881763527 203% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 1.9629258517 204% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 10.4468937876 172% => OK
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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