The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last 10 years.
Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend
A recent decade is the witness of the considerable reduction in the proportion of kids suffering from obesity by almost 20%.Apparently, that seems to be a good sign toward the children's health. Then, i will through the light upon this disturbing trend.
To start with, there were multifarious reasons that helped create this positive movement. Initiatively, the critical factor may come from the attention of parents. Definitely, due to the bloom of media about the demerits of being overweight, parents gradually took their offsprings' diet into consideration. In details, they nourished their children with healthier eating habits including more grain and vegetables, even outdoor activities could be involved too.
Probing further, the trend could also be a part of the teenagers' self awareness. To explain, at the adolescent period, they were more aware of their appearance, especially their weight. In fact, they might be teased about how they look like by the peers. As a result, it would be a motivation for them to take up low-carb or green diet, even taking more exercises and sports to enhance not only their physique but also their health.
Additionally, the figure of loss in weight of kids resulted from the emblem of super stars. Those people set a good example of being fit and healthy to the kids. Consequently, they would affect the children's' thoughts of the merits of eating well and being positive causing the motivation to have their weight lost.
Conclusively, the fall in overweight children percentage in western country indicates a great signal. I pertinaciously believe in the benefits the trend might bring.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, consequently, if, look, may, so, then, well, in fact, as a result, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24621212121 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87183920153 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8653706388 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3333333333 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129747027691 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454676934874 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552005856397 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0893524051028 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682277619994 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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