The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organizations Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

It is can be suggested that growing concern in modern life about internet companies and organizations, which are storage of information of people. While some individual think this trend is beneficial, I am of the opinion that the drawbacks are more serious to consider.
On the one hand, I have to concede that holding personal's new by technology could be have many benefits for users. The first benefit of these problem is helping individual to conveniently storage their information. In fact, having more and more social media that can hold to inform. Therefore, Facebook is a famous social media on the internet and users could post their picture and status on its. The another benefit is creating helpful services for consumers. For example, google map is an entirely free flatform used by millions that follow individual and directing for people go to everywhere that they want.
However, I am firmly of the opinion that the disadvantages are significant, outweighing the benefits. Needless to say the misuse of big data will only become worse on the future. Supporters of this view believe that if contain a large amount of information, individual will be difficult to find their information and loss of access. In addition, some news about people are leaked on the internet by hacker. Advocates, over the years, having more and more people who have been robbed of their information and even sensitive information is published on social networks. Making users don't trust in storing their information on the internet.
To conclude, although I often believe that holding information of personal by technology have many benefits, I am convinced that this trend will have a negative future, so governments and companies to research a degree control.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 136, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this problem' or 'these problems'?
Suggestion: this problem; these problems
...enefits for users. The first benefit of these problem is helping individual to conveniently s...
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Line 2, column 322, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'medium'?
Suggestion: medium
... Therefore, Facebook is a famous social media on the internet and users could post th...
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Line 3, column 581, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...lished on social networks. Making users dont trust in storing their information on t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15034965035 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85132303219 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548951048951 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0496689356 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0666666667 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221452662925 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675697045117 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447751138924 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139003068319 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367192100324 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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