In the past twenty years, women had experienced a change in their status in the society. Here was a change in the mindset of people that women should receive the same treat and there should be a balance between the status and position of males and females in the society. Because of this change, women can start to work in the society. However, there is an accusation that women are the culprits that cause many social problems to occur which are believed to have been done by young people as they are not at home taking care of their children.
First and foremost, I do not agree to the argument as the occurrence of the problems was not the responsibility of women alone. The children who involved in crimes are perhaps because they want to attract attention from their parents. I have to emphasise the importance of the way the parents educate their children as this will affect the behaviour of their children. Many children who are caught for committing juvenile delinquency such as vandalism have been asked of their reasons to do so. It is surprising that most of the answers were they want their parents to care for them and show their love. Thus, even if the mothers are not working and stay at home taking care of their children, there is still possibility for juvenile delinquency to occur as what the children want is the love from their parents. They want their parents to devote some time to spend with them. It is therefore not fair to point the finger to women who are working.
In addition, in my opinion, I feel that the responsibility and role played by the schools are very important in preventing the problems faced by young people. When children are learning in school, teachers shall pay attention to their students and monitor as many students as they can. For instance, if a student always plays truant, teacher should inform parents as this is one of the signals that shows the student might involve in juvenile delinquency. Besides, it is important that schools educate children on the impact of committing crimes so that the intimidate effects of the punishments could prevent juvenile delinquency.
Although there might be some people think that women have responsibilities in taking care of their children, we shall not forget that there are two important characters in the family which are the father and the mother. Some people believe that children who commit crime are from incomplete families. Nonetheless, we have to admit mothers from incomplete families have many tasks to do besides caring for their children. Therefore, counsellors in the school should pay attention to those children come from incomplete family.
To sum up, mother shall not be the only one to blame for not showing care to their children when juvenile delinquency occurs. Other parties should give helps to mothers in taking care of the children. It is important for children to have the education on the impacts of committing crimes and teach them to be more rational in everything they do.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Line 9, column 163, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mother'.
Suggestion: mother
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'thus', 'for instance', 'i feel', 'in addition', 'such as', 'in my opinion', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.240072202166 0.247107183377 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.184115523466 0.155533422707 118% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0505415162455 0.0946595960268 53% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0415162454874 0.0501214627716 83% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0613718411552 0.0437548338989 140% => OK
Prepositions: 0.140794223827 0.122226691241 115% => OK
Participles: 0.0397111913357 0.0403226058552 98% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.57025775038 2.80594681477 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0415162454874 0.0326793684256 127% => OK
Particles: 0.00180505415162 0.00163938923432 110% => OK
Determiners: 0.0902527075812 0.0861772015684 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0252707581227 0.021408717616 118% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0198555956679 0.011925033212 167% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3019.0 1933.35771543 156% => OK
No of words: 515.0 316.048096192 163% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.86213592233 6.12580529183 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.20517956788 113% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.332038834951 0.374742101984 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.256310679612 0.28420135186 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.172815533981 0.203846283523 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0970873786408 0.137316102897 71% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57025775038 2.80594681477 92% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.037074148 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.425242718447 0.56093040696 76% => More unique words wanted, or less content wanted, or remove duplicated content.
Word variations: 48.6521384361 60.7387585426 80% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0891783567 143% => OK
Sentence length: 22.3913043478 20.7743622355 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2703488163 49.517814964 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.260869565 127.492653851 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3913043478 20.7743622355 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.652173913043 0.814263465372 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 48.022372309 49.1944974215 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.46540880503 1.69124875643 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.574462904914 0.332605444948 173% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.146644371226 0.102741220458 143% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0768765193019 0.0668466124924 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.56751943352 0.534860350844 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.108646955775 0.148594505496 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.23933640992 0.134430193775 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953185327959 0.0742795772207 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.43996139908 0.324371583561 136% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0652700173739 0.0638462369009 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.413655062139 0.228012699653 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0969939225605 0.058150111329 167% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.68436873747 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 5.90881763527 203% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.5751503006 233% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 10.4468937876 182% => OK
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9