At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Currently there are some countries have a large number of younger youth when it is compared with the number of older people. In my opinion, I consider the population at developed countries should respect the advantages of their increasing growth rate in younger adults which will positively reflected on human resource strategy and military status.
Despite the fact of disadvantages below, I think there are many benefits that are provided by increasing number of adults. Firstly, it positively correlates with the countries’ human resource. As it will afford the opportunity to increase production growth rate. Specially in hand-made product, such as furniture, dairy and shoes manufacturing Secondly, the large number of younger adult means strong militry. Therefore, advanced countries will apply themself by those youth who can join army. Last but not least, creative people like younger adults have enough passion and eagerness to create intiative society. Thus, countries would include more healthy and intiatively community.
However, there is no doubt that it could be found some issues towards increased number of younger age people. One of problematic situation is revolution which could happen. For instance, many of developed countries encounter the issue of youth demonds which consequently cause revolution. An another drawback is chaos which could happen throughout less educated younger people. As a result in their over enthusiasm to practise dangerous activities. In other words, there is no control against threat that be practised by younger adults. Further more, private organisations could tend to hire more youth rather than fair old age people which consequently leads to unbalanced jobs opportunities.
In conclusion, while relatively some problems throught population with large number of youth, I think it brings many benefits that will outweigh its disadvantage.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...Currently there are some countries have a large number of younger youth when it is compared with ...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ith the countries' human resource. As it will afford the opportunity to incre...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...furniture, dairy and shoes manufacturing Secondly, the large number of younger ad...
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Line 3, column 470, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this youth' or 'those youths'?
Suggestion: this youth; those youths
...vanced countries will apply themself by those youth who can join army. Last but not least, ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...assion and eagerness to create intiative society. Thus, countries would include m...
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Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a drawback' or 'another drawback'.
Suggestion: A drawback; Another drawback
...ds which consequently cause revolution. An another drawback is chaos which could happen throughout ...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hroughout less educated younger people. As a result in their over enthusiasm to pr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1620.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66433566434 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88304470906 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622377622378 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8008128925 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2941176471 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8235294118 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1176470588 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273356892189 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802776563186 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967284535752 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18685441998 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0822571439435 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.25 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.