At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Submitted by Odiljon on Mon, 05/22/2017 - 04:58

At nowadays, the number of young people around the globe are becoming increasingly higher compared to the number of senior people. However, such a tendency is likely lead to positive development in their society. This essay will outline that the advantages of this outweigh the demerits. At first, the benefits of this proclivity will be listed that young generation are able to materialize more advancements, which in turn, may promote the lives of people, followed by an analysis of how the disadvantage might prompt issues.

The root cause of having an enormous number of young adults in any society is that this increases the likelihood they will be able to contribute more, since at the present time, young descent are more concerned about various issues which is happening around the world. That is to say that they will have far more opportunities to implement technological advances, which in turn may bring a vast amount of convenient as well as mobility in order to facilitate people's lives. For instance, Sergey Bring is one of the eminent personality and prodigy in the domain of Information Technologies, was able to actualize the amazingly popular product, namely: Google. By virtue of this software product, people have not faced variety problems that comprises: searching for information, learning something new and even finding a necessary location.

Also, except for technological development, there are a large number of volunteers who are particularly occupied by young generation. Especially, these people are able to assist and work with underprivileged children who are in need. In other words it benefits their development not only emotionally but also morally. For example, due to maintenance by these vibrant young people, children are significantly more likely to achieve good results in academic world as well as in various types of sport. However, it is worth to take into consideration that young adults without senior people's support and motivation, youngsters would not achieve these outcomes.

Mainly, older people can encourage young individuals, giving him/her right direction and enhance their abilities. If there was no a support, therefore they would not able to conquer such positions. However, there is also downside, if there were more older people than youngsters, so we would not see such progresses as we see them today.

On balance the fact that increasing the number of young generation leads to solely positive development and improved the poor children's standart of living clearly outweighs the argument that such a tendency is likely to contribute more rather than older people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 55, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...or technological development, there are a large number of volunteers who are particularly occupie...
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Line 7, column 123, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on and enhance their abilities. If there was no a support, therefore they would n...
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Line 7, column 129, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... enhance their abilities. If there was no a support, therefore they would not abl...
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Line 7, column 247, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
..., there is also downside, if there were more older people than youngsters, so we would not...
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Line 7, column 323, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o we would not see such progresses as we see them today. On balance the fact t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, except for, for example, for instance, as well as, in other words, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 417.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3309352518 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89310225504 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544364508393 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 506.74238477 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2844070438 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.764705882 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5294117647 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11764705882 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215563238731 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667653248056 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729247722975 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122745938265 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0712543683439 0.056905535591 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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