At present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of old people. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is said that in some countries, the population of young people is more than the old ones. I believe that this situation can have equal advantages and disadvantages.
On the one hand, if the population of young adults grows, countries may experience some problems related to unemployment. This situation is more understandable when large numbers of university students graduate from universities at the same time and want to find a suitable job. The oversupply of labour can cause hard competition in the job market and even make poorer working conditions, as many employers may misuse the situation to bring the wages down and exploit the young workers. Also, this condition can force or persuade some young job seekers to make a decision to migrate abroad in search of work, which is not a desirable outcome for each country. Additionally, the increasing number of young adults can impose more costs on the government in the terms of providing health services, food materials and other important public facilities.
Despite the drawbacks mentioned above, the growing number of young adults can be seen as a positive trend. The young population can make a country vibrant, as they are risk-takers and are more passionate to use their creativity and innovative ideas to experience new things to keep up with their international counterparts in the first world countries. Such individuals can help their countries have a thriving economy. This is because these people are willing to enrich their knowledge about the new and modern methods in different work contexts to attract the attention of powerful companies for international exchanges. In addition to this, a large number of youth individuals let the government gain more money in tax to spend on the improvement of necessary public services.
In conclusion, in my view, there are both benefits and drawbacks if the number of young population increases compared to old ones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 644, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, so, as to, in addition, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17515923567 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94457882285 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576433121019 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8983618498 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1538461538 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46153846154 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288317770571 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102822091707 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690407521146 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184021973024 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257770338859 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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