At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages

In this day and age, young inhabitants account for the majority while elderly population is few in some nations. Numerous people are of the opinion that this phenomenon has its pros and cons. In this essay, I will clarify both of the sides of this issue.
On the one hand, aload of older people bring some benefits for younger people and their countries. Firstly, they who possess a myriad of knowledge about ancient history will talk to their descendants about historic milestones, heroes's sacrifice, making their offsprings have more grasp about history and gaining patriotism. Not only do they do that, but they also give many handy counsel. Most adolescents ask for some advice on choice vacations, colleges. etc. For example, when my brother goes to the museums with my granpma, she always tells him the uses of weapons, impressive events in the past, etc.
On the other hand, youngsters also have advantages in developing their territories. Living in this era, most of them possess an excellent adaption to world fluctuations which help them complete themselves. Developing themselves are synonymous with advancing their countries, having more and more opportuniyies to cooperate with foreigns. By doing so, their citizens will be received well-being from their governments and their nations will be more and more prosperous. Furthermore, a large number of adolescents and young adults possess native aptitudes for art and music , which appeal other people from all over the world to there, making their nations more and more well- known. Take Korea for example, a great number of fans from other nations buy BTS tickets, developing their entertainment industry.
In conclusion, the advantage of having more younger people utterly outweigh it of having a lot of elderly population.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23693379791 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71934859311 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599303135889 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8738259112 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.2 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1333333333 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169753117228 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060045527939 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388431420697 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105537257138 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270675302393 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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