At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Now days, there is a significant rise in propotion of younger generation in many of our nations all over the world. However, this trend may has both positive and negative effects on our communities. Meanwhile, ithink benefit we will recieve from this increase will be greater than its harmfull effect.
On one hand: there are many reasons why this increase is vital to our countries. First of all, nowday our world becomes more convenient; "in other world" we can do many things at the same times, due to technological development. Younger people are more adapted to these changes than eldery. "As" their mind are more creative in this technological world. For example the amazing software product which is discovered by young creator; this programme is providing our world with endless benefits in all ways of our lives.
The advantages of young generation are not only encluded in mental creativity but also, in physical ways. "as" younger population are more fit than eldery, so they can be engaged in hard works such as, constructing buildings .
In contrast, this increase will lead to rise unemployment rate among younger generation. "As" chances are provided by goverment are generally limited. Conflicts, emitional, as well as psychological disturbances will appear due to pressure which is put among those catogary.
In conclusion, ithink rise in younger generation in our communities will lead to advance technological development. However, also I strongley suggest goverment must increase chances of employment to meet this rise and prevent their adverse effects on our communities

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Average: 1.1 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1383.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46640316206 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07107055649 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612648221344 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.470197542 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8666666667 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0683313283415 0.244688304435 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0251327167177 0.084324248473 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0220542848313 0.0667982634062 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0380503564315 0.151304729494 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0211970006175 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.15 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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