With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
For the past few decades, the existing of non-academic subjects have been too familiar with us which is hard to deny. The connect between academic and non-academic subjects in the syllabus of the school system are now being argued when some said the non-one should be removed to help children to progress their mind in the academic subjects. From my point of view, I think that both academics and non-academics will balance a child's mind and useful in the future.
To start with, it is normal for a child to learn everything since he was little because it is easy to concentrate when he is still young and he can achieve things as fast as possible. But this turn out some parents will make a big pressure on their’s child. Having a balance from the curriculum subjects and some non-academics might help a child to develop their curious mind and that leads to the fact that they can learn better and some of the non-ones might help them in their own life after like cooking or sewing.
On the other hand, whether removing the non-academic from the natural syllabus might not work a lot when a child already develops his own mind in the field he likes such as mathematics or chemistry. Because he will not have any other curious about the others. Other subjects just to help him to have some time to relax and gain more experiences for his future.
To sum up, I totally disagree when removing the non-academic from the syllabus because the academic curriculum might benefit for young people but the non-academic subjects also play an important role in daily life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...t leads to the fact that they can learn better and some of the non-ones might help the...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...the fact that they can learn better and some of the non-ones might help them in their own l...
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Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...likes such as mathematics or chemistry. Because he will not have any other curious abou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, i think, such as, to start with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1300.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71014492754 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54049331434 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547101449275 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.0695013044 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.0 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.7 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319466862203 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128359769373 0.084324248473 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0962868122258 0.0667982634062 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208884934046 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0890323380792 0.056905535591 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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