Q1. Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city centre with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Recently, the conversion of green spaces near the central area of the city into residential buidlings has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that superseding eco-friendly facilities, such as gardens and parks, close to the central business district by housing estates in order to reduce time devoted to commuting to work should be encouraged, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that people should preserve environmentally friendly amenities near the city centre do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that gardens and parks close to the city centre enable numerous workers to take a rest helping them to unwind during their lunchtime. To provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for gardens and parks for employees, they would have difficulty alleviating stress, exerting a detrimental influence on their work performance.
My opinion, however, is that it is an effective way of combating a high volume of traffic to substitute a multitude of apartment blocks for environment-friendly places close to the city centre. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that if a myriad of working people residing near the central business district travel to their workplace by foot or bike, other dwellers in suburban areas would be less likely to suffer from traffic congestion, making it possible for the public to have an improved standard of living. This is because the number of personal vehicles on roads would decrease remarkably. In addition, depriving commuters of less time devoted to travelling to work results in employees concentrating more on their occupations. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that demolishing green areas around the city centre in a bid to construct apartment complexes is necessary for the reasons discussed above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29768786127 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00390253705 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604046242775 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.800312397 49.4020404114 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.928571429 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7142857143 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64285714286 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305029074274 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842292153014 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540340871355 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166287191838 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335225093029 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.