Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city centre with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Recently, the conversion of green spaces near the central area of the city into residential buildings has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that superseding eco-friendly facilities close to the city centre by housing estates in order to reduce the time dedicated to commuting to work should be encouraged, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that people should not remove green areas, such as gardens and parks, around the central business district do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that having parks and gardens enables employees to take a rest helping them to unwind during their lunchtime. To provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for gardens and parks near the city centre, a large number of workers would have difficulty alleviating stress, which can even exert a detrimental influence on their work performance.
My opinion, however, is that it is an effective way of combating traffic congestion to transform environment-friendly amenities close to the central area of the city into a myriad of apartment blocks. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that if a multitude of working people residing near the central business district commuted to and from their workplace by foot or bike, other dwellers in suburban areas would be less likely to suffer from heavy traffic jams, making it possible for the public to have an improved standard of living. This is because the number of personal vehicles on roads would remarkably decreased. Moreover, depriving commuters of less time devoted to travelling to work would allow them to concentrate more on their duties, helping them to build successful careers at their workplace. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that substituting apartment complexes for environmentally friendly amenities near the central business district is necessary for the reasons discussed above.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 407, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...gardens and parks near the city centre, a large number of workers would have difficulty alleviati...
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Line 5, column 613, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'decrease'
Suggestion: decrease
...onal vehicles on roads would remarkably decreased. Moreover, depriving commuters of less ...
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Line 5, column 865, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he above, I find these more persuasive. In conclusion, it is undeniable that the...
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Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that substitu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28808864266 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92119678005 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595567867036 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.2892334975 49.4020404114 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.357142857 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7857142857 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275268399855 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779107446397 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575714443661 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155550150729 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639974864306 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 407, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...gardens and parks near the city centre, a large number of workers would have difficulty alleviati...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 613, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'decrease'
Suggestion: decrease
...onal vehicles on roads would remarkably decreased. Moreover, depriving commuters of less ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 865, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he above, I find these more persuasive. In conclusion, it is undeniable that the...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that substitu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28808864266 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92119678005 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595567867036 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.2892334975 49.4020404114 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.357142857 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7857142857 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275268399855 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779107446397 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575714443661 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155550150729 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639974864306 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.