Q2 :Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinions.
Recently, the impact of celebrities' aid on ordinary people has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that influencers can contribute to an increase in the level of attention to social problems by supporting global charities, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that renowned people helping socially disadvnataged people negatively affect everyday people do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that some entertainers exploit charitable activities for themselves, causing individuals to become less interested in social issues. As an illustration, a Korean singer named Kim Hun patronised a global charitable foundation in the year 2015, enabling him to obtain fame as well as wealth. However, according to an article released by the Seoul Times, it turned out that the main purpose of his donation was receiving tax waivers. Given these points, some people hold the view that celebrities can worsen the essence of aid.
My opinion, however, is that public figures' assistance towards global charitable institutions exerts a positive influence on the masses. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that not only can they inform individual people of the importance of charitable activities, but they are also able to raise awareness amongst the public given that they are often exposed to mass media. In addition, the majority of fans of celebrities have a predisposition to participate in charitable work when their idols undertake it. To exemplify, Lionel Messi spent approximately 3 million US dollars on a global charity in South Africa in a bid to combat global hunger, which led a myriad of his keen supporters across the globe to pay attention to poverty. As a result, they donated 5 million US dollars to the same organisation. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that celebrities' help towards global charitable organisations brings with it positives for the reasons discussed above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1950.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31335149864 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98643817434 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621253405995 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3919518777 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.705882353 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238878686019 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656126862735 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674547570734 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146207744237 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767346133931 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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