QQ2: Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your
Recently, the impact of celebrities' aid, such as donations, on ordinary people has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that influencers can contribute to an increase in the level of attention to problems by supporting charities, while others argue otherwise. And I wholeheartedly agree with the former stand. In the following essay, both views will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, those who claim that renowned people who support socially disadvantaged people negatively affect the masses do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that some entertainers exploit charitable activities in an undesirable way, causing individuals to become less interested in social problems. To exemplify, Lee Ki-Hun who is a singer in South Korea, patronised a charity, which enabled him to obtain fame from the public. However, according to an article, it turned out that the main purpose of his donation was so as to receive tax waivers. Given these points, some people hold the view that celebrities can worsen the essence of aid.
My opinion, however, is that well-known people's support toward charitable foundations exerts a beneficial effect on the public. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that celebrities could not only inform the public of serious problems but also raise their awareness considering that famous people are often exposed to media. In addition, a multitude of fans of celebrities have a predisposition to participate in aid when their idols partake in it. As an illustration, Lionel Messi made use of approximately 3 million US dollars to a charitable organisation in South Africa to deal with global hunger in 2018, which made it possible for his keen supporters in the globe to pay attention to poverty, leading them to donate around 5 million US dollars. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that celebrities' help brings with it positives in society for the reasons discussed above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, while, as to, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12121212121 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93697763698 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617079889807 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4150851531 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.1875 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6875 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266519322111 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777472223148 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766437649439 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159589821002 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789900210015 0.056905535591 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.