With the rapid advancement of cummunication technology, eg smart phones, tablets, and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There has been a difference of opinions regarding whether the widespread introduction of cutting-edge communication devices these days brings about more drawbacks than benefits. Personally, I completely agree with the view that the disadvantages of those technological equipments might be more significant than the advantages.
On the one hand, communication technology has effectively changed the way people interact with each other and share information. First, thanks to a lot of leading-edge devices such as smart phones, tablets and so on, we now can easily keep in touch with friends or relatives who are half the world away. As long as they can access the internet, those devices might help them to make long-distance video calls or video conferences which enable people to feel as if they were having real interact. Second, communication technology results in the popularity of social networks, which facilitate human’s transmission of information. Through Facebook, Twitter, Link In, etc., people can share what their friends and families are doing, as well as keep up with other social activities happening around them. Besides, one video or story can go viral on the internet very quickly due to such a huge amount of network users.
On the other hand, the drawbacks of technological devices should be also considered. First of all, many advances in technology have discouraged real interaction among people. Face-to-face meetings seem to be superseded by text messaging or video calls, therefore, people do not tend to be interested in outdoor activities anymore. As a result, many youngsters do not have chance to develop their soft skills, such as speaking and problem solving skills. The second downside of modern communication devices is that there have been so many people who are over-reliant on those things. It will be very dangerous if they do not refrain from using appealing applications and games. In other words, people who are too engrossed in their games might cause many unfortunate accidents. Third, devices such as smart phones and tablets provide criminals with chances to make online scams. As a consequence, there a lot of device users have fell victim to those incidents and lose a large amount of money.
In conclusion, I argue that although the advances in communication technology create many values, the drawbacks of them still eclipse the benefits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 546, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... is that there have been so many people who are over-reliant on those things. It will b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, regarding, second, so, still, therefore, third, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2024.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 380.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32631578947 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00532767928 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568421052632 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0356668515 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.444444444 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1111111111 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.77777777778 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128523427011 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407583758901 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338742346752 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0706543162356 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256671253251 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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