Rate of diabetes and obesity are increasing in many countries around the world. Some people think that governments should ban soft drinks and sugary snack from schools. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this proposal?
With the growing amount of diabetes as well obesity rate. Some individuals believe that governments should step in and ban sugary consumable goods from school’s ground. I completely agree that there should be a control over sugary consumable goods, such as soft drink or sugary snack.
There is no doubt that over consumption is one of the cause of obesity as well as diabetes. Sugar is widely known to be favor among some eaters, so naturally by keep consuming a large amount of sugar can be addictive. Eventually, sugar addict lead onto over consumption which later can cause obesity, follow by diabetes vice versa. For example, there are several studies suggest that soft drinks, which are naturally overly sweeten, have a potential risk to cause obesity along with diabetes.
Moreover, there are a concern about kids’ obesity and diabetes rate. Lately, the rate of children’s obesity and diabetes has arisen. School should step in and take action on these particular matters. For instant, by halting on any sugary consumption good can decrease the chance of getting diabetes or obesity. School can also educate their children on how unhealthy is it to be a subject to both obesity and diabetes, especially in children. With that being said, school should provide a advices on these matters too.
In conclusion, sugary consumption goods, such as soft drink or sugary snacks, have can be the cause of both diabetes and obesity. With the rising amount of obesity and diabetes in people of all age, it might be logical if government take action on this matter seriously. Because, both obesity and diabetes can greatly effect population health in long run.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... that being said, school should provide a advices on these matters too. In concl...
^
Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a advice' or simply 'advices'?
Suggestion: a advice; advices
... that being said, school should provide a advices on these matters too. In conclusion, s...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, well, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1392.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06181818182 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55464315569 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534545454545 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.834373527 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1875 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273816804844 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102006724933 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628100847118 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194411437846 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103130452163 0.056905535591 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... that being said, school should provide a advices on these matters too. In concl...
^
Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a advice' or simply 'advices'?
Suggestion: a advice; advices
... that being said, school should provide a advices on these matters too. In conclusion, s...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, well, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1392.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06181818182 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55464315569 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534545454545 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.834373527 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1875 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273816804844 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102006724933 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628100847118 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194411437846 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103130452163 0.056905535591 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.