The recent years' sports stars have become increasingly famous and wealthy. For some this is a benefit, raising the profile of sports, but for others, it is a negative influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The recent years' sports stars have become increasingly famous and wealthy. For some this is a benefit, raising the profile of sports, but for others, it is a negative influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, well-known sports players are becoming significantly popular and affluent. This created mix reactions between people, as this is believed by some that money and fame are good motivators for athletes to get better results. Conversely, this idea is refuted by others. These points of view will be discussed in this order.

One common argument is that hope for gaining wealth would increase people's desire to perusing a sport. Some best football players have raised in inappropriate conditions. While being rich and famous has been the most important motivation for them to reach their personal best. So, trying to make money had been a good catalyzer for sportsmen to be keen on continuing their strenuous exercises. Thus, it is clear why many support the idea that money is a good motivation for most athletes.

Another argument in favor of sportspeople earning substantial money is that it makes the sport more attractive. However, it is believed by some that wealth should not act as the main motivation for sportspeople to blow the competitions away. Because there are more important factors like enthusiasm for the sport, team loyalty and physical fitness that would be necessary for success in sports activities. Take Michael Phelps as an example, he was born to be a strong swimmer, because his physical characteristics facilitate his success. So it is obvious that Fame and money solely could not lead to a better sports career. Thus, it is understandable why some refuted the idea that money is a good motivator for all sportspeople to train hard.

In conclusion, it is unlikely that money and fame earned by sportspeople will reduce any time soon but this trend of more money and attention in not beneficial to sports overall.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, however, if, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1466.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09027777778 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82555270186 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569444444444 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0639622754 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.625 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211664445144 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748924123324 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369543710224 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129310149138 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557495401628 0.056905535591 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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