Schools should teach children some academic subjects which will be beneficial to their future careers Therefore other subjects such as music and sports are not important To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

In the recent days, there is a enourmous rise in the syllabus arduous. A host of people claim that children will have the favorable careers in the future if schools revoke music and sport classes. While i reckon that academic subjects are critical factor when serving to future careers, i believe that the other subjects are equally important.
On the one hand, it is indisputable that the academic jobs have the financial reward higher than the other jobs. There is a dramatical climb in the amount of time spend on studying academic subjects act as a catalyst for students to assimilate knowledge and enhance the falcuty of marshal expertise to serve the future jobs. Students who learn conscientiously in academic subjects and have academic achievement in the curriculum, excelling in study skills and group work paves the way for having the jobs that ensures adequate income.
Nevertheless, Abrogating the music and sport classes lead students to face many heath warnings and social problem that cause inadequate development of pattern behavior and body physique. The head irritation and obesity is initiated impairment due to the strain of dismay studying syllabus, making children underperforming to achieve the lecture. Students who participate in sport and music class, ameliorating the pressure of study effect and get a subtle and sharp mind. It make students become the spontaneous person, enrolling emotional intelligence that can beat the other job seekers.
In brief, although i agree that academic subjects play an integral part in students, i suppose that students can cram many knowledge and comprehend themself by studying other subjects

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, nevertheless, so, while, i reckon, i suppose, in brief

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30798479087 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81468998712 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58174904943 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4737157419 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.909090909 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9090909091 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72727272727 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217633340426 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809911233985 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646341088758 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143869443289 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689414468298 0.056905535591 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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