Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones Why is this case Do you think this is a positive or negative development

Several children glued on their smartphones each day for hours. This essay will explain its contributed cause and to what extent this could be a negative or positive for children development.

Regarding the reason, this phenomenon can be caused by the busy parents who do not have enough quality time to play with their children. The parents usually spent eight hours even more every day. Hence, they frequently tired and have no energy to interact with their children so that they choose smartphones as tools to make their children calm.

In my point of view, this rising problem will lead to negative effects on the children development because on that range of age the parents supervision is one of the essentials factors. On that period of age, children can not filter any content that can be accessed through their mobile phones. It is frequently reported that children accidentally access any bad contents and websites that can cause trauma (if they see any thriller contents) or even trigger them to do something they should not do like pickpocketing, lying, cursing etc. Furthermore, spending hours on mobile phones will drive children to a sedentary life style which characterized by less motoric activities. This can be dangerous, because in that golden period of development children need activities that can train their muscles and bones in order to support their growth.

In conclusion, less parents control will make children being addicted on smartphones which related to the several negative impacts on their development such as bad behaviours and less active.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, if, regarding, so, as to, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1953125 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6874545781 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57421875 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 396.9 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.662285427 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.909090909 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2727272727 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63636363636 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33367992703 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132706230469 0.084324248473 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467601527984 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211490856117 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553307299184 0.056905535591 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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