Although it is sometimes thought that commercial businesses finance sports to promote their products and services and it is beneficial for future of both business and sport, other people believe that some detrimental effects are associated with this. In my opinion, I consider that sponsorship of sports by companies is absolutely advantageous for product promotion and further encouragement of sports.
On the one hand, some people think that advertisement of various products by financing sports is ecstatic way to attract vast number of potential consumers at the same time and I agree. In the other words, huge number of sports, such as football, cricket, tennis and others are generally sponsored by big firms (retail, banking and others) to get immense attention for their products by a wide number of people in the stadium because massive crowd of people attend these games specially international. Furthermore, sponsorship hugely benefit future of both sport and sport person. For instance, companies pay felicitous rewards and great amount of money to winning team and excellent players of the sports, that contently motivates sport person and team to play with their best tremendous efforts in further matches. Moreover, commercial firms also promote some sports that are not very popular among people specially some women's games; for example hockey, cricket and others, this, consequently encourage these games worldwide.
On the other hand, it is often believed that product promotion through sports execrably affect society. For example, some alcohol companies promote their different brands that entice visitor of sports to drink and eventually aggravate the alcoholism that is serious issue of the modern society. In addition to this, massive sponsorship allure players appalling to take part in sports only for wealth not for pride, respect and nation that ultimately results in doping, betting and other absolutely unethical ways to conquer the games. Finally, some popular sports are massively paid by big firms, while other less admired games are underpaid that creates a huge gap between sport and visitors, along with this dissuades sport person to play excellently.
In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I think that sponsorship is the outstanding way to persuade large number of people for products and motivates sports person by giving them ample amount of incentives specially for less popular sports.
- The bar chart below shows the number of students in three different courses from 2001 - 2004. 67
- Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids.Discuss both views and give your opinion. 73
- There is no future for public transport, because travelling by car is so much more convenient.Do you agree or disagree? 73
- Some people say that TV advertisements have benefits, while others believe the opposite. Discuss both views, give your own opinion and include examples from your experience. 61
- Nowadays the use of social media such as facebook twitter and so on is becoming more popular than one on one conversation Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages 75
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ves specially for less popular sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 380.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45789473684 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67671812946 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523684210526 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 633.6 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.5338929671 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.833333333 106.682146367 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6666666667 20.7667163134 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.75 7.06120827912 209% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301623221384 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120668513859 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519745086806 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19924089195 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263133486223 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 50.2224549098 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.98 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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