Nowadays, some people feel extremely delighted as they can live in a whole new world with peaceful daily life and independent atmosphere while some countries are complaining about the alarmingly overweight condition which leads to a severe decrease of health and fitness level. Personally, I suppose that harmful food, modern facilities, and people’s attitude towards their health are the 3 main contributors to this condition. Subsequently, the most effective solution for solving this problem is to focus on the inducements.
For starters, I believe that fast food, available services and people’s awareness are the most compelling reasons explaining obesity in some nations. Firstly, it is obvious that fast food appears alongside every walking street in the world with colourful shapes and scrumptious tastes which could charm anyone wandering around. Secondly, in our modern world, there are a plethora of facilities that help you deal with your problems including physical stuff. As a result, on the positive side, the task can be done more quickly and effectively, on the other side, these facilities make people lazy and dependent. For example, back more than a decade, Vietnamese people used to commute to work by bicycles or on foot instead of driving motorbikes or cars as now, then, on the negative side, Vietnamese people gradually depend on motor vehicles rather than physical ones.
Finally, the last contributor to obesity and the decline of the health level in some countries is the residents’ consciousness of health. Currently, there is a great number of speeches that encourage people to enjoy their life freely and dynamically by doing whatever they desire. Once again, if this quote is misunderstood, it will incentivize people to live an uncontrolled life including abandon their health with unhealthy food and drinks, and also without essential health check-up. Therefore, these three main reasons are the most convincing answers for low health level in some countries.
According to these causes, there are some practical measures that we should take to reduce the average weight and also to protect the citizens’ health. Firstly, journalism and mass communication should pay attention to public health as they should broadcast some daily bulletin alarming the dangerous effects of obesity, unhealthy food and lifestyle. Secondly, some social organizations should arrange some kind of ‘green activities’ such as an ‘Earth-week’ when people walk or ride bikes to work. Finally, the most significant measure comes from the human attitude towards their health. In other words, each person should listen to their bodies and treat them scientifically by reducing sugary intake and doing daily workout with friends and families.
In conclusion, overweight condition with an unhealthy level increasing is damaging a vast majority of the world population which is caused by unhealthy absorption, lifestyle and personal awareness. Therefore, some visible solutions to this problem would be for journalists, socialists to fulfil their mission, and for the human to take good care to their health.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 310, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[7]
Message: The word 'anyone' in subjunctive clause must be used with a base form of a verb: 'wander'.
Suggestion: wander
...mptious tastes which could charm anyone wandering around. Secondly, in our modern world, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, i suppose, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2651.0 1615.20841683 164% => OK
No of words: 483.0 315.596192385 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48861283644 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88576594853 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 176.041082164 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554865424431 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 809.1 506.74238477 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.8191546378 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.526315789 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4210526316 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94736842105 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284746754768 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817742786924 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393013535415 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154063666764 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380470354354 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 78.4519038076 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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