In some countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to solve the problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In some countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to solve the problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Submitted by Thira on Mon, 02/05/2018 - 00:09

Nowadays, increasing dramatically number of health issues are prevalent to children. The numerous problems are impacted by diet or even environment, then causes obesity and disease-related in young age. Some people argue that this problem should be tackled and resolved by government. I agree with this belief to what extent as in my opinion, this situation should be the responsibility of both the government and individuals.

The health management targeting children is a duty of society and also its individuals. Parents should concern severe diseases such as heart disorders and high blood pressure, which probably happen with their children and pass through the next generation in the future. These ailments might contribute to unhealthy condition in community. Hence, parents as well as other adults need to instill the importance of lifestyle and health management among young children in order to equip them with long-term health consciousness.

However, healthy of young citizen would be better off, if government supports fund and appropriate facilities. Unhealthy in people nowadays perhaps the major cause that slowing down economic, costing big budget to cure weak workforces instead of utilizing money to develop the other sides. As a result, government should impose strict measures regulating unhealthy conditions. For instance, the ministry of public health has the authority to ban snacks which adding high sodium or sugar, exceeding the standard. Inducing children look firstly at the label of products, calculating calories before eating in order to reduce the risk of overweight and unhealthy.

All things considered, it is reasonable to respond these issues by cooperating from government, society and individuals. As far as I am concerned, current marketing makes consumers, especially young people, confused about the truth nutrition of foods.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, so, still, then, well, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63250883392 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96054878449 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.660777385159 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.003903698 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.266666667 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8666666667 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.13333333333 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15276785944 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436880903918 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495186893232 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0794929318377 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737123758426 0.056905535591 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.05 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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