In some countries children are becoming overweight and unhealthy Some people think goverment should be responsible for solving the problem Discuss about views and give your opinion

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In some countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think goverment should be responsible for solving the problem. Discuss about views and give your opinion

In most countries, children are obesity and mall nutrition. Many people assume government should be answerable for the issue because the parents play an important role in children's activities and nutrition given to them.
The important of role parents influence activity children to maintenance their weight and their healthy. This is say ,the parents can observe directly on their children exercise on terms of the growth every day, So the children get balanced nutrition. For example, In 2020, Based on a survey conducted by UNICHEF of 1000 of children in Indonesia there was amount 500 of children who live with their parents closely have an healthy body because their parents give light exercise to burn childrean’s calories. As a result, their children have an ideal weight.
The parents are responsible to give a healthy food to their child. However,that they do not experience overweight and stay healthy. This is because the food given by parents purpose to fullfiled the nutrients in their children need and support children's growth and development. For example, In 2013 to 2016 in Journal Nutrision and Food Research by Diponegoro University in Central Java, in their research journal there was amount 500 of children in their growth period, 20% have poor gain caused by malnutrition. As a result, the children be susceptible to wasting and stunting.
In conclusion, the parents have big performance to children lifestyle and nourishment given to their kids, and it is good choice. The parents should give a some activity like sport for their children.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, for example, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1316.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20158102767 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.780288963 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 176.041082164 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517786561265 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 387.0 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.5753778298 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.230769231 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4615384615 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30769230769 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151776890751 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730757398124 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577784520064 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117469207099 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313975917914 0.056905535591 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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