In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for the government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In contemporary life, enjoying a huge amount of junk food has gained in popularity and made a paradigm shift in health issues. although it seems highly reasonable for the government to introduce a stricter policy on this kind of food, I firmly contend that the drawbacks are more significant.
On the one hand, there are some reasons why policy makers enact the higher tax on this instantly-served food. To begin with, it is obviously clear that fast food industries bring the big number of profit regardless of causing health problems for consumers such as obesity or heart diseases. To be specific, there are more and more KFC or Lotteria which are invested by both onshore and offshore in order to satisfy with an increasing number of demands. Nevertheless, although almost customers understand deeply what dangerous the junk food is, they still afford it because of the fact that fast food is definitely served immediately and conveniently for not only take-away but also stay-to-eat. As a result, the problems may become worse unless the government takes strong actions.
one the other hand, I strongly believe that the tax of the fast food should not be raised. First, this would be a hard punch to the country’s business and finance if that policy was approved. To explain, many people would lose their jobs because of no investors, which might relate to other industry fields. Second, although junk food compromises our health, nobody can deny not only its advantages like convenience but also its good taste. Besides, the government should take alternative policies like either educating dwellers about the harm of junk food or encouraging organic food to be developed widely in order to decrease a number of people who are badly effected by junk food.
In conclusion, while there are benefits from the increase on tax on the fast-food industries, it seems to me that this would be better if the government considered the other solution such as the above idea about having organic food broaden vastly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, still, well, while, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1690.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0447761194 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7399603082 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585074626866 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.1040875432 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.0 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7692307692 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8461538462 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318159364021 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107142567363 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524252998701 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194851134175 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491203777101 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.