In some countries young people have become richer healther and live longer but they are less happy What are the causes What can be done to address this situation

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In some countries, young people have become richer, healther, and live longer, but they are less happy. What are the causes ? What can be done to address this situation?

In today's fast-changing world, better living standards have served the young adults to have better conditions in terms of wealth, health and longevity. They still, however, encounter sadness and appear to be less satisfied and unhappy. From my point of view, there are a multitude of contributors to this problem as well as the solutions to deal with it.

On the one hand, the sense of sadness despite having better life quality in people can boil down to several reasons. The first thing to notice is that the young have to carry greater burden and stress from work, study and society nowadays. To enjoy a better-off life, they have to make a lot of inroads into their fields of work as well as to always compete with their peers. That self incentives and ego have pushed the young people excessively that they are under stress and have no peace of mind. Furthermore, youngsters always try to meet the family expectation. For example, if students do not get good grades, they will develop depression and embarrassment in front of their family, which then can lead to a stressed life.

Another thing worth considering is that the style of withdrawing themselves makes young adults less happy. Due to the proliferation of the Internet, every person to glueing their eyes to the phone screen in lieu of having real conversations. As a result, they can be more vulnerable to real life deceit or friends with bad intentions. Without doubt, not having sentimental friends means that those individuals do not have anyone to talk to and convey their feelings. That accumulation of negativity and heartbreak can make them unhappy and unsatisfied.

However, there are a myriad of keys to tackle this problem. Obviously, people can motivate the young to express themselves more openly. They can create some public clubs to share their stories, take in some positivity and get away from toxic social media. Moreover, the society and family should encourage them to try their best but not putting too much pressure on them. Then those adolescents can both stay healthy, enjoy their hard-working spirit and freely prove their abilities and aptitudes at their own pace. According to some anecdotal research, 80% of teenagers and young people feel more positive when they have family by their side. Because of that, family members should show support and affection to their child to make them happier.

In conclusion, there are a barrage of causes to the unhappiness of the young, who already have an affluent, healthy and long life. Fortunately, I believe there are several solutions to this problem by giving people incentives to share the thoughts, showing proper support and reducing excessive pressure.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
...nd unsatisfied. However, there are a myriad of keys to tackle this problem. Obvious...
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'barrages'?
Suggestion: barrages
...happier. In conclusion, there are a barrage of causes to the unhappiness of the you...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, still, then, well, another thing, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 41.998997996 164% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2259.0 1615.20841683 140% => OK
No of words: 448.0 315.596192385 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04241071429 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63433618971 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553571428571 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.6704105057 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.2173913043 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4782608696 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26086956522 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216794130911 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642075563168 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424907394624 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124949436409 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133076558616 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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