In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies.What do you think are the cause of this?What solutions can you suggest?

Learning in academic program might be the best way of leading to success. However, there are still some drawbacks like stressful school life or less spare time for students. In this essay, some causes and solutions will be discussed.

Firstly, students have to learn a huge amount of knowledge. In many countries like India and China, there are at least 9 subjects in school that must be studied and be taught theoretically. Therefore, students are left studying all by heart or their GPA will decrease. Moreover, youngsters also receive pressure from parents and teachers. In fact, schools use students' performance to drum their reputation and parents take pride in their children's achievement. In addition, teachers always treat students with high scores better than the others.

In such a situation, several solution must be taken account of. First of all, in the term of awareness, learners have to determine that they study not for school but themselves. Changing their mindset is extremely important, it will reduce a lot of stress on students. Second, we need an innovation in curriculum. Field trip is one of the suggestions that is suitable. There will be no more theoritical learning and practical learning will take over. The trip will help learners understanding and remembering the lessons easier so that they can have leisure time at home. However, this will also cost a lot and require facilities.

In conclusion, a sympathy of parents is needed. Goverment should implement policies supporting the innovations.

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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun solution seems to be countable; consider using: 'several solutions'.
Suggestion: several solutions
...han the others. In such a situation, several solution must be taken account of. First of all,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, at least, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1289.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 246.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23983739837 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83848431243 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.646341463415 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 380.7 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.5616142269 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.8421052632 106.682146367 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.9473684211 20.7667163134 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31578947368 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131828755915 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0380334393982 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392339814965 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0690093481411 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438341553987 0.056905535591 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 50.2224549098 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.22 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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