In some cultures children must follow very strict rules of behavior while in others they are allowed to do almost anything they want Do you agree or disagree with the statement

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In some cultures, children must follow very strict rules of behavior while in others they are allowed to do almost anything they want.
Do you agree or disagree with the statement??

Submitted by roni on Sun, 01/17/2021 - 12:29

In some societies, children have to maintain draconian regulations of conduct whereas in others they are given permission to do around everything they wish. It is disagreed that children must follow harsh laws of behavior. Analyzing both the lack of brain development as well as the hindrance due to strict rules to a child to participate in extracurricular activities will support the said statement.

Firstly, children who are subject to confined/confining rules, resulting in talent development deficiency. For example, children who are living in Taliban dominated areas of Pakistan cannot participate in the science Olympiad. Unfortunately,this is something that hinders the intellectual development of the children of that particular area. Thus this makes it clear why children must not follow hard rules of behavior.

Secondly, owing to strict rules of behavior, children in some cultures are not allowed in extracurricular activities. For instance, children in Saudi Arabia cannot take part in extra curricular activities like football, cricket or any other sports due to religious orthodoxy. As a result, they lag far behind in extracurricular activities. From this ,it is understood that societies should not maintain strict rules of behavior.

In conclusion, strict rules of behavior do not help children develop their talents and become proficient in extracurricular activities. Hence it is clear why children should not maintain harsh rules of conduct. After analysing this subject, it is predicted that the negative aspects of argument over maintaining the stick rules of conduct will be stronger than the positive ones and because of this children should be allowed to do almost anything when they wish.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 269, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...zing both the lack of brain development as well as the hindrance due to strict rules to a...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ell as the hindrance due to strict rules to a child to participate in extracurric...
^^
Line 5, column 241, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , this
...e in the science Olympiad. Unfortunately,this is something that hinders the intellect...
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Line 5, column 343, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...f the children of that particular area. Thus this makes it clear why children must n...
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Line 7, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hildren in some cultures are not allowed in extracurricular activities. For insta...
^^
Line 7, column 232, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lar activities like football, cricket or any other sports due to religious orthod...
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Line 7, column 352, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...in extracurricular activities. From this ,it is understood that societies should n...
^^
Line 9, column 137, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...oficient in extracurricular activities. Hence it is clear why children should not mai...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 202, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ldren should not maintain harsh rules of conduct. After analysing this subject, i...
^^
Line 9, column 301, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at the negative aspects of argument over maintaining the stick rules of conduct w...
^^
Line 9, column 397, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...r than the positive ones and because of this children should be allowed to do almos...
^^^^
Line 9, column 420, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s and because of this children should be allowed to do almost anything when they ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, second, secondly, so, thus, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1476.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61216730038 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2204402912 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543726235741 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.539184636 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.428571429 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7857142857 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35714285714 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355000271186 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122592524035 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082000817978 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21966895234 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0748712294288 0.056905535591 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 269, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...zing both the lack of brain development as well as the hindrance due to strict rules to a...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ell as the hindrance due to strict rules to a child to participate in extracurric...
^^
Line 5, column 241, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , this
...e in the science Olympiad. Unfortunately,this is something that hinders the intellect...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 343, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...f the children of that particular area. Thus this makes it clear why children must n...
^^^^
Line 7, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hildren in some cultures are not allowed in extracurricular activities. For insta...
^^
Line 7, column 232, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lar activities like football, cricket or any other sports due to religious orthod...
^^
Line 7, column 352, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...in extracurricular activities. From this ,it is understood that societies should n...
^^
Line 9, column 137, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...oficient in extracurricular activities. Hence it is clear why children should not mai...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 202, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ldren should not maintain harsh rules of conduct. After analysing this subject, i...
^^
Line 9, column 301, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at the negative aspects of argument over maintaining the stick rules of conduct w...
^^
Line 9, column 397, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...r than the positive ones and because of this children should be allowed to do almos...
^^^^
Line 9, column 420, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s and because of this children should be allowed to do almost anything when they ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, second, secondly, so, thus, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1476.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61216730038 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2204402912 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543726235741 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.539184636 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.428571429 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7857142857 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35714285714 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355000271186 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122592524035 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082000817978 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21966895234 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0748712294288 0.056905535591 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.