Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is commonly supposed by some professors that learning how to play piano, flute, or guitar is necessary for children nowadays. While I agree that music could bring about some benefits for them, I believe that not all students need to spend time on this subject.

To begin with, students should be encouraged by parents and teachers to learn how to play an instrument for some reasons. Firstly, playing musical instruments helps to entertain children after undergoing heavy knowledge from their official schools. This would support them to find out a new soul full of joy, excitement, and happiness, which they could not see in other complicated subjects such as Math or Chemical. As a result, those children could receive a great academic performance thanks to positive thinking getting from the music world. Secondly, students might develop their cognitive thinking, creativity, and even brain functions when playing an instrument. For instance, knowing how to play guitar could help them compose a song which could go viral afterward. -

However, I believe that every student possesses different interests, ambitions, and capacities, which might impact their selection in learning instead of listening to a fixed model from educationists. This means children need to be reliant on their innate abilities to make a decision whether or not music plays an important role in their career path and life. For example, a girl should not waste her time learning the way to play piano although she has spent around a year researching without achieving a good result or a positive sign. Therefore, freely choosing their directions and favors would be a better option in lieu of forcing themselves while their limited abilities do not allow them to do.

In conclusion, while some students might embark on learning a musical instrument due to its value in terms of entertainment and creativity, I believe that it is necessary to take a consideration based on their abilities.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...eir innate abilities to make a decision whether or not music plays an important role in their ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...consideration based on their abilities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1659.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20062695925 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79546053619 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601880877743 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7377635061 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.615384615 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5384615385 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2307692308 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199886844461 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763563787366 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502426329261 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123099186119 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289977871934 0.056905535591 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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