Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly Others value quality of work above appearance Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Nowadays, a lot of organizations or companies believe that their employees should elegant dress as well as dress code. The rest think that quality of work or potential employees are essential more than appearance. In my point of view, the appearance and the value quality of work are all necessary, significant with each organization.
On the one hand, the dress smartly can help people make attractive, good feeling with customers. With trend recently, the first impression of humans usually is the appearance. Therefore, the way wearing of workers may become an advantage in the work. However, if companies just focus on appearance and forget about quality, it will be affected on development, the progress them. This may lead to missing excellent candidates but do not have outstanding appearances. For example, Jack Ma is known as chairman of Alibaba Group, who be refused by several companies cause of his looks. But he is one of the most successful billionaires on e-commerce platforms. This is relevant to racism or prejudices such as Asia people who have abilities work on companies in Europe sometimes be a tease, despise.
In contrast, the focus on quality might select a number of potential human resources, because not everyone is beautiful, or does not have enough time to care about the looking self. On the other hand, it will be disadvantages with some major like fashions, cosmetics, et cetera.
In conclusion, the opinion of social at the present commonly popular visual as well as cosmetic surgery more and more popular. I think we should not put too much emphasis on appearance, except for some areas where appearance is required.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, well, except for, for example, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08823529412 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89209039472 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632352941176 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.5435816278 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.2666666667 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4666666667 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202010374032 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574386400861 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623654876378 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12274430774 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101787441299 0.056905535591 179% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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