Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Without a bit of doubt, the award has a specific place in children raising, which is the most decisive factor in the kid's future personality. While some people believe that every single high mark from children should attain a prize, another thinks it is unnecessary or even harmful to their long-time behavior. In my view, give an award for each high mark is not appropriate because of two reasons. First, providing money for each high score can finally affect children's mental health and motivation; it may harm a child's intrinsic motivation, determining whether an action is eternal or provisional. Although giving money as a reward for every high grade establishes behavior that does not exist from the beginning, to continue what is already available, internal motivation is needed. Imagine a child who gives money after every high mark, and his parents have to go a mission or travel, or due to some unknown reasons, it is not possible to encourage their children immediately by money or other things as rewards, and then guess what happened? A child whose efforts to get high scores to depend on prizes probably experiences a significant decrease in grades and regress, leading to feeling down, anxiety, or other mental problems. We can see its necessary to teach children to love what they do by their heart without dependency on external reasoning such as money or any specific prize.
On the other hand, if children can not predict when they will achieve a commendation, they will probably work harder; this is already a discussed fact in psychology literature, unpredictable or periodic, better than giving it in a regular estate. Because it is not stable and they don't know the big prize when coming in all tasks, they try to be their best. For instance, when I was a primary school, my father told me he decides to buy me a doll based on my final exams, but he didn't tell me I have to get how many high scores, on that year. He gave me a single prize, but it made me feel excited about all my scores and do my best. If the rewards are predictable, maybe it's not exciting enough to drive me to attain high grades on every task. It is better to give just a single award and employ a child's mind with success every single moment. Finally, I assume that providing money for every high score is unnecessary, but it is a threat to children's mental health and regular prize because its nature predictably couldn't offer enough.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, so, then, while, for instance, such as, in my view, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 426.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71126760563 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59935058531 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549295774648 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 0.809619238477 865% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.5388321995 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.8 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.38176352705 46% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25894093145 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825426284968 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421260163073 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196164117812 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604075576881 0.056905535591 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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