Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a bit of doubt, award has a specific place in children raising, which is most decisive factor in
future personality of kids. While some people believe that every single high mark from children
should attain a prize, another think it is not necessary or even harmful to their long-time behavior. In
my view, give prize for each high mark is not appropriate because of two reason.
To begin with, give money for each high score finally can affect children mental health and
motivation, it may have negative affect on child's intrinsic motivation, which determines whether an
action is eternal or provisional. Although, give money as a reward for every high grade establish
behavior that there is not exist from the beginning, in order to continue what is already available
internal motivation is needed. Imagine a child who give money after his every single high mark, and
his parents have to go a mission or travel, or due to some unknown reasons it is not possible to
encourage immediately their children by money or other things as rewards, and then guess what
happen? A child whose efforts for get high scores depends on prizes probably experience a big
decrease in grades and regress, which also lead to feel down, anxiety or other mental problems. We
can see its necessary to teach children to love what they do by their heart without dependency on
external reasoning such as money or any specific prize.
On the other hand, if children can not able to predict when they will achieve a commendation,
probably they will work harder, this is already a discussed fact in psychology literature,
unpredictable or periodic award better than to give it in a regular estate. Because it is not regular
and they don’t know the big prize when is coming in all tasks they try to be their best. For instance
when I was a primary school my father said me he decide to buy me a doll based on my final exams
but he didn’t say me I have to get how many high scores, on that year he gave me a single prize but
it made feel excited for all my scores and do my best. If the prizes are predictable may be its not
enough exciting to drive me for attain high grades on every task. It is better to give just single award
and employ a child mind with success every single moment.
Finally, I assume not only give money for every high score is not required, it is threat children mental
health as well, and regular prize because its nature predictably couldn’t provide enough excitement
that is keep child's mind with do his best every single moment.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2023-06-27 | YasamanEsml | 76 | view |
| 2023-03-16 | sonyeoso | 76 | view |
| 2023-01-14 | nikki07hung | 60 | view |
| 2023-01-14 | nikki07hung | 60 | view |
| 2023-01-04 | minammah | 70 | view |
- Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 56
- Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 61
- Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 61
- Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 56
- Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 34, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...h and motivation, it may have negative affect on childs intrinsic motivation, which dete...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 28, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...e establish behavior that there is not exist from the beginning, in order to continu...
^^^^^
Line 20, column 39, Rule ID: SAY_TELL[2]
Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'told'?
Suggestion: told
... when I was a primary school my father said me he decide to buy me a doll based on ...
^^^^
Line 20, column 50, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'decides'.
Suggestion: decides
...s a primary school my father said me he decide to buy me a doll based on my final exam...
^^^^^^
Line 21, column 15, Rule ID: SAY_TELL[1]
Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'tell'?
Suggestion: tell
... based on my final exams but he didn’t say me I have to get how many high scores, ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, then, well, while, for instance, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7174392936 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4415809399 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507726269316 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.0470225194 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.642857143 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3571428571 20.6045352989 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 27.0 4.53405017921 595% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248261211851 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907359460665 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04261883268 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0664507091461 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447768183431 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.