Some people argue that immigrants should adopt the local culture when immigrating to a new country. An alternative view is that they can adapt to new environment by establishing a minority community. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is an indisputable fact that the last 20 years has seen a dramatic increase in the number of immigrants to other countries. There remains some disagreement as to whether immigrants should stay in small groups and follow the own social norms; however, in this essay I intend to contend that it is the responsibility of immigrants to observe the accepted rules of behavior in their adopted countries, both written and unwritten.
On the one hand, it is an undeniable fact that there are a multitude of minority groups in different parts of the world. A particularly salient example is that in America, areas such as Little Saigon or China Town are well-known for the traditions and customs of Vietnamese and Chinese, correspondingly. These immigrants are inclined to utilize their own languages and follow their own social norms. Although cultural diversity could increase the color and vibrancy, it is my belief that distinctions might alienate migrants from the locals. These Vietnamese and Chinese, therefore, rarely participate in communal activities.
On the other hand, if migrants are willing to adapt to cultural norms in adopted countries, they are more likely to facilitate societal cohesion. A notable example is that the young generation tended to learn new languages and adopted the patterns of behavior and societal rules in their destination countries and they literally became an indispensable part of these countries. It is my belief that similarities are inclined to unite people whilst distinctions are prone to divide. In this sense, too much cultural diversity is detrimental to both migrants and the locals; and a strong society is a homogenous one with shared values, goals, and beliefs.
By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that migrants should contemplate adapting to new societal norms and culture in their adopted countries. Whilst the borders between nations become gradually blurred, there will be a large influx of immigrants to some countries. Therefore, research into this phenomenon would be warranted.
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- Some people argue that immigrants should adopt the local culture when immigrating to a new country. An alternative view is that they can adapt to new environment by establishing a minority community. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ntries. There remains some disagreement as to whether immigrants should stay in small groups ...
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Line 2, column 543, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this Vietnamese' or ''?
Suggestion: This Vietnamese;
...ight alienate migrants from the locals. These Vietnamese and Chinese, therefore, rarely particip...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, well, as to, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30581039755 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97908930934 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529051987768 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4405594323 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.928571429 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3571428571 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78571428571 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189142988313 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057925170171 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455713452502 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117673294156 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380650405662 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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