Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food , clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes . Other people believe that it is imp

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Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food , clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes . Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views give your own opinions

Some people think that letting children make their decision about food , clothes and entertainments could cause a society which solely think about themselves. Others believe children should be allowed to make their own choice that influence on them. In my opinion, I am side with the latter statement.
It is often thought that parents allow their children to opt for whatever they wants might result in a community that people only think their own expectations. The reason why for this could that children become familiar with opting for themselves without considering about other factors such as situations and conditions. For instance, when a boy allowed to choose one of toys in a store, he will definitely opt for the most favourite one and take no consideration about whether it is highly priced or not. If he is not received this toy, he can be frustrated and getting on his nerves. For many times like this situation which makes a child become self-centered and only look at the self side.
However, I strongly believe that it is essential for children to make their decisions which affect on them. When children themselves choose their own options , they can be independent from their parents. For example, they might provide themselves with their clothes every morning without support from their parents. On the top of that, that children may sometimes give their opinion also help them to aware of this situation comprehensively rather than parents upsetting them. Many parents in Africa do not believe of listening to their children which causes may Afican children become vandals and aggressors toward the community. Last but not least, when children can free to their choices, they could make mistakes but parents can guide them and instruct them to follow the right path which enables them to become mature and grown up gradually.
In conclusion, parents should let children have their own choices and who people support them

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...their children to opt for whatever they wants might result in a community that people...
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Line 2, column 357, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'choosing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: choosing
...tions. For instance, when a boy allowed to choose one of toys in a store, he will definit...
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...ntered and only look at the self side. However, I strongly believe that it is e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 51.0 24.0651302605 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06875 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57670416307 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540625 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.636681817 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.133333333 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367489171207 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141470143392 0.084324248473 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118759733025 0.0667982634062 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272992893408 0.151304729494 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113028846086 0.056905535591 199% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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