Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matter (such as food clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is importa

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Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matter (such as food clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affects them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some argue that every children who make their own decision on daily life will become egoistic, while others think it is necessary for children. Although enabling children to make their own decisions build selfish adults, I am of the opinion, it cans develop children become responsible and confident people.

On the one hand, children who allow to make their own choices, they become selfishness. They have less consideration for others. They also only think about themselves. For example, one of student in the Kindergarten School in Yogyakarta was angry when his opinion rejected by teacher. This occur because the students have a priority to make their own wishes in a home. However, it is important to children to make the decisions because it gives a certain advantages for their life.

On the other hand, the children necessary to decide their choices because it will grow confidence and independence adult. At the same time, the Parents teach them how to make a good decision. For example, Najeela Shihab as parenting expert said that for growing the independence people, the children must be given trust from parents. It also transform iinto mature and responsible people.

In conclusion, children notable to have their own decisions because it gives many advantages within their growing, such as: confidence and autonomous adult.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 37, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'making'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: making
... On the one hand, children who allow to make their own choices, they become selfishn...
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Line 5, column 343, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'transforms'?
Suggestion: transforms
...st be given trust from parents. It also transform iinto mature and responsible people. ...
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Line 7, column 115, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es many advantages within their growing, such as: confidence and autonomous adult...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1132.0 1615.20841683 70% => OK
No of words: 216.0 315.596192385 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24074074074 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68275752327 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 176.041082164 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578703703704 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 354.6 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.6244125001 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0769230769 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6153846154 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46153846154 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266043948819 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103008216054 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840475873229 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173907110774 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059399323997 0.056905535591 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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