It is a highly controversial issue that whether kids should spend their spare time on playing whatever they want or taking education activities. I hold a firm conviction that depends on children’s interests and abilities, parents should encourage them to reach a balance between educational and non-educational activities in leisure time.
On the one hand, there are those who maintain that applying educational activities for offspring can bring many benefits for their academic performance as well as career prospects as a whole. First of all, in order to foster mental capabilities of kids, parents have a tendency to stimulate them to play educational games. To illustrate, some parents allow preschool children play puzzle words or game with numbers, which leads to the academic performances of their kids are more outstanding than other students. Secondly, in term of career paths, parents believe that children can broaden their horizons through games have academic features, so they will become more competitive in the job market. Owing to fierce competitions in the workforce, besides learning at schools, If children develop playing academic games habits to gain profound knowledge, they may become highly-qualified labourers in the future.
On the other hand, some parents claim that children have obligations to do any activities that they like in their leisure time. Firstly, in terms of health, offspring should balance between learning time and playing time. Indeed, most students spend about 8 to 10 hours on learning, which can lead to stress or depression if their parents deny children the freedom to play outdoor games or enjoy extra-curricular activities. An additional reason is that childhood is a time that children create valuable memories with their friends and families. According to recent researches, once kids who are not set priority on education by their parents and likely to attend non-educational activities in their spare time, they usually have a positive outlook on life and can be easy to gain success in the future.
In conclusion, leisure time play an integral part in the development of children, hence, parents should stimulate not only educational activities but also non-academic ones so as to foster mental and physical development of kids.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to time'
Suggestion: to time
...fspring should balance between learning time and playing time. Indeed, most students...
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Line 7, column 174, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...l activities but also non-academic ones so as to foster mental and physical development ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, well, as to, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41504178273 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9996443537 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543175487465 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.2309612181 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.538461538 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6153846154 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6153846154 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175666290195 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766576701736 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614323547934 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119774963033 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386458790711 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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