Some people believe that children who are brought up in families which don't have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up in wealthier families. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
It is true that children come from humble backgrounds are well prepared for adult life. However, I disagree with the idea that these children have more advantages in adulthood than their wealthy peers.
On the one hand, humble family backgrounds can have several positive impacts on the adult life of children. Firstly, children from middle-class or low-class families tend to be more independent, and they rely less on their parents. Indeed, since their fathers and mothers can not afford the tuition fees for schools, these children often have part-time jobs in their early ages to pay for their study and support their families. Secondly, children of low or middle economic status are often more determined and ambitious than others, as they often possess burning desires to improve the financial situation of their families. For having clear goals and big ambitions, these children could respond better to stress and make more wise decisions when they grow up.
However, I do not believe that rich children have fewer advantages in adulthood than those who come from low-class families. The main reason for this is that these children have all the facilities and resources needed for their future. For example, most affluent parents can afford to send their offsprings to prestigious schools, which have the best teachers and offer the best education that they enable students to acquire more practical skills and professional knowledge. Also, as wealthy parents often come from elite class, they can set a good role model for their children to follow. To illustrate, many eminent entrepreneurs, including Donald Trump, attributed their achievements to family influence.
In conclusion, while children come from humble backgrounds are often well-prepared for the future, I believe that they are unable to have more advantages than their wealthy peers in later life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3063973064 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59802657604 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535353535354 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7559831662 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.230769231 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8461538462 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.61538461538 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208993484988 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974801073582 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058744133271 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161409486999 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437459804313 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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