Some people believe that competitive sports, both team and individual, have no place in school curriculum. How far do you agree or disagree ?
More and more residents agree to drop sports out of school timetable, which has competitive trends as a team or by their own, in the school timetable. While I support partially that few school games waste precious times of students, I do trust that there are advantages which those sports can bring to them.
Some hold the view that competitive sports do not bring any benefit to students, because It wastes time and money of their parents, also harmful for their mental and physical health. Firstly, students are people who have a strict timetable in school, so they need relaxing sports to relieve stress as well as less being time-consuming as competitive sports, after the busy schedule. Playing competitive sports such as football may cause injuries, especially to their health. Furthermore, students who interested in those sport, are considered to have more levels of aggression and bullying than those who don’t play this kind of sport. Lastly, some sports require expensive sports accessories which most students do not have enough money to afford, specifically to poor students, due to their parent’s income are not being stable.
However, there are other merits of competitive sports that should make it become one of the main subjects in school. Competitive sports do not only help students to improve their ability, but also personalities. According to global specialists in sport, this type of sport enhances solidarity between team members, also connect each person to become a firm group which helps a child to work as a team. In addition, the student abilities will be improved in many facets of life, when they play sports which contain the competitive spirit. These children can improve their life skill, such as dealing with difficult without hesitation or braving to challenge any difficult situation in their life. For example, Japanese parents have let their kids play competitive sports, such as basketball at the young age, because this sport helps their child to feel less timid, brave to overcome obstacles in life and work as a team. That is the main reason Japanese children have received many compliments from parents from other countries when their kids are less confident than those from Japanese.
In conclusion, there are conflicting opinions about competitive sport whether should it be added to student timetable or not. From my viewpoint, these sport need to become an obliged subject same as others to students of all age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, lastly, may, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 402.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15422885572 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65616667501 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534825870647 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.739060956 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.5 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.125 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138566543285 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561344271491 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395220033849 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0916572107446 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043356430488 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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