Some people believe that entering the workplace after school is far more beneficial than studying at university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is conceived by some that entering the workplace after graduating high school has much more benefits than continuing to study in university. Based on my experience, I certainly agree with this statement. To begin with, starting a job after school is the easiest way to earn income immediately. Students are able to maintain their life by their own money. Furthermore, they could share the financial burden with their family members by enrolling in blue-collar labour or startup, which do not required professional job qualifications.Take Henry Ford who was one of the best entrepreneurs as a good case in point. He was the founder of the Ford Motor Company. Primarily, his success was accomplished by using the “assembly line” to manufacture his cars, which is called the revolution for industry. Only a small proportion of people know that he didn’t study at the university.
In addition, the persons who get in working after school could gain a great deal of experience more soon than others. Because of the feature of work, they are required to communicate with a large number of people in different types and then able to understand them. They will make sure what type of people they should make friends, consequently reduce them to become friends with the bad guys. According to a survey, the lack of experience in society took the most percentage of university students, because they only concentrate on major knowledge and forget to improve soft skills in the future, result in confusing real relationships in the future.
All things considered, I strongly believe that coming in the workplace after school is more beneficial than studying at university.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, if, so, then, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1403.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1204379562 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97846221167 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627737226277 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.227406637 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.923076923 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268645116945 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880025162342 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111074479401 0.0667982634062 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210175756613 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107595382037 0.056905535591 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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