Today, many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and little time on sports. What are the reasons for this and is it a positive or negative development?
It is true that many youngsters waste hours and hours on computer games, neglecting sports and physical exercise.I believe that there is at least one important factor to account for this trend, which is in my opinion a totally negative one.
I would argue that the marketing industry is chiefly culpable for the fact that a growing number of children are addicted to computer games. Even in developing countries, a lot of youngsters these days are computer-literate, and software companies know how children are easily swayed by the novelty of playing new games. Through their advertising, such companies aim specifically at children as their target audience to promote their products. These soon become obsolete and are replaced by new ones. As a result, children are not taking up sports. Instead, they find their excitement in imaginary virtual worlds of gaming rather than the real, physical world.
The main argument against computer games is that they are detrimental tochildren’s health. Firstly, a sedentary lifestyle is encouraged by playing computer games, whereas youngsters need to take regular exercise. Without sport, children may become prone to obesity. My cousin, for example, never plays any sports and he is putting on weight, mainly because of all the hours that he spends playing computer games. Secondly, too much time spent on computer games may lead to social isolation and resulting mental health problems. It might be a good idea for computer games to be sold with a warning that they carry health risks, like cigarettes or alcohol.
In conclusion, advertisers are responsible for the gaming obsession of many youngsters, and I consider that this has serious negative consequences for health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, whereas, at least, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1449.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26909090909 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81372315918 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614545454545 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2499873084 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.5 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6428571429 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31414625383 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911484398208 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053459015464 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173758093941 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426226024214 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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