In this era of information, some people claim that data in the scope of scientific studies, business and the academic world ought to be shared widely, whereas others believe that some information should be kept in confidence because of its high value. From my point of view, though the widespread information can benefit people in many ways, some of it should not be public.
To begin with, giving people the accessibility to insurmountable sources of data is advantageous. Firstly, learners can absorb knowledge and acquire new skills through that supply of information freely and efficiently without having to pay for classes. For instance, nowadays, despite the highly academic level of IELTS, a considerable number of English learners have been able to self-study and achieve a high band with the unlimited learning materials on the Internet. Additionally, numerous beginners in cooking, make-up or other fields can easily develop to a higher level with the help of detailed tutorials on Youtube. As a result, as information is shared extensively, the multitudes’ intelligence is likely to improve in an effective and economical way.
However, it is my persuasion that a little information is not suitable to be leaked out publicly. In detail, most companies and organizations own their secret database, methods or recipes that play an instrumental role in their success; therefore, they would like to save the aforementioned data privately. Facebook - the most powerful social media platform and its story of saving users’ data would exemplify this precisely. As this platform holds a huge load of personal information, it would be highly risky if Facebook operators leak it all out since hackers can use it for plenty of bad purposes such as frauding, kidnapping. Therefore, when they once accidentally let some third parties know about users’ data, they confronted a fiery wave of criticism and abandonment from governments and users. Additionally, some studies can bring more harm than good when being established. They can be weapon-making or drug-making tutorials which are likely to exert numerous negative effects on people if being done inaccurately or disproportionately. Some consequences such as injuries, accidents or even death can be seen as a result of those cases. Because of those previously mentioned reasons, I wholeheartedly agree that not all information should be exchanged without scrutiny.
To sum up, in spite of fostering human’s self-development excellently, information has to undergo a rigorous process of examining to ensure that no losses and risks will be found.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 180, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that no losses and risks will be found.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, so, therefore, third, whereas, as to, for instance, such as, as a result, in spite of, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 408.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40196078431 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20347146426 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 176.041082164 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600490196078 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1637066494 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.647058824 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23529411765 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234452743307 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722413990793 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795648526573 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151719650219 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117813344255 0.056905535591 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 78.4519038076 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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