some people believe that pop stars deserve to earn more money than performers of classic music. Others disagree.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Opinion is divided as to whether popular celebrities, such as pop singers, or artists who play classical music should enjoy higher income. Personally, how much they earn should be in direct proportion to what they can offer.
the advocates of popular entertainers would argue that the higher levels of popularity should reflect higher earnings. Obviously, popular entertainment, such as pop music and rap, has always dominated the most profitable share of a music market, which means if an artist is able to achieve recognition and establish their fandom regardless of their means, then he should be entitled to monetary benefit from such effort. To illustrate, many a renowned singer in Vietnam would utilize any TV shows to enhance their images and increase income whether or not such occasions could help them demonstrate their talents, while classical performers often confine themselves to well-established theatres where they can only enjoy a limited following.
The proponents of the opposite views often indicate that being able to play classical masterpieces requires a protracted process of practice and corrections, which should translate into higher payment. many symphonies composed by prominent writers, such as Bach or Mozart, normally take not only a pianist but also an entire orchestra to coordinate perfectly so as to produce an impeccable performance. And the levels of sophistication embedded in these plays are usually far superior to those in popular music, which certainly deserves greater admiration and hence financial support from listeners.
However, in today’s free market everything that is on sale ought to be determined by the laws of supply and need. therefore, should an artist regardless of what kind of music they play be able to produce extraordinary plays, then his rare talents will likely gain increasing popularity and in turn, generate commensurate revenues.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
Opinion is divided as to whether popular celebrities, such as pop singer...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...t proportion to what they can offer. the advocates of popular entertainers would...
^^^
Line 3, column 542, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...nhance their images and increase income whether or not such occasions could help them demonstr...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 203, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Many
...h should translate into higher payment. many symphonies composed by prominent writer...
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Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ntire orchestra to coordinate perfectly so as to produce an impeccable performance. And ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 115, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ermined by the laws of supply and need. therefore, should an artist regardless of what ki...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48813559322 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95084697086 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630508474576 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.9472785165 49.4020404114 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.9 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5 20.7667163134 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0875959999863 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0360291083298 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034484587391 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0577559054269 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310764385691 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.27 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
Opinion is divided as to whether popular celebrities, such as pop singer...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...t proportion to what they can offer. the advocates of popular entertainers would...
^^^
Line 3, column 542, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...nhance their images and increase income whether or not such occasions could help them demonstr...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 203, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Many
...h should translate into higher payment. many symphonies composed by prominent writer...
^^^^
Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ntire orchestra to coordinate perfectly so as to produce an impeccable performance. And ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 115, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ermined by the laws of supply and need. therefore, should an artist regardless of what ki...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48813559322 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95084697086 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630508474576 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.9472785165 49.4020404114 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.9 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5 20.7667163134 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0875959999863 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0360291083298 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034484587391 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0577559054269 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310764385691 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.27 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.