Some people believe that time spent on television, video and computer games can be beneficial to children. Others believe this has negative effects on a child. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
People have different views about how electronic devices affect young people nowadays. While there are some benefits of ultilizing electronics, I would argue that it has more drawbacks.
To begin with, spending time on television, video and computer games can be seen as beneficial. Firstly, some movies or programs are highly educational. For example, a famous cartoon called "Brave", not only serving for entertainment but also illustrating the value of maternal love and aspiring to do whatever they want. Children are often impressionable, so it may help to contribute a good character of them. Secondly, it is sort of improving language since there are various foreign channels on television such as BBC, CNN, or Cartoon Network... If teenagers use in appropriately way, these electronics will be became positive.
However, these reasons given above can be considered from the opposite angle. First of all, the expenditure too much time on activities of entertainment will directly affect health and physical development. As can be seen, couch potatoes do not have well-building, in comparison to people who always take part in outdoor activities. The second reason is the negative impact on mentality as well as the life in future. For instance, shooting games on computer can make children get used to using the weapons and performancing violent behavior. As a result, families should have strict disciplines to reduce the addiction on electronic devices.
In conclusion, this trend of young generation will have both beneficial and detrimental effects on themselves.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...impact on mentality as well as the life in future. For instance, shooting games on comput...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, sort of, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 246.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47967479675 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17787396541 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.69512195122 0.561755894193 124% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.0605498151 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.8666666667 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8 7.06120827912 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209665765723 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595541523467 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613016420758 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114622668876 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0156490078958 0.056905535591 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.82 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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