Some people believe that traditional culture is being damaged as it is used as a tool for making money in the tourism industry. Others think it is the only way to protect culture and tradition.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Tourism always plays an important role in the profit of a nation. Some people are convinced by the idea that traditional culture has lost its value over time because it has been treated as a money-making tool. The rest believe that it is the only method to carry on culture.
The reason that leads to the first belief system is the overcharges of some tourist attractions. Sa Pa is one the most vivid examples, there are thousands of foreigners who visit this area every year. Some tourist companies are using their trust and naiveness to fool them into buying useless crafts under the name of helping the minority ethnics community. They have sold various handkerchiefs, hats, scarfs with a huge amount of money by convincing the tourists that those crafts are handmade. These actions have caused a lot of negative damage to the image of the minority ethnics in specific and Vietnamese people in general.
But on the other hand, toustim has brought lots of tradition to more people through media and compercial. In the development of tourism, they always search for new types of entertainment to please the customers’ needs. In that process, they have saved a lot of endangered traditions and created multiple career options. For example, without tourism, the art of making Dong Ho paintings would be lost. At first, the artists who paint Dong Ho paintings were disappointed, frustrated because no one buys those paintings anymore, so they can’t not pursuit their passion for a living. Thanks to the commercial by touristry, Dong Ho paintings have come closer to the crowd and soon gained a huge popularity. The more people know, the more paintings are sold, which has boosted the passion of the artists and Dong Ho continues to live on. Because of that I strongly believe that the development of the tourism industry will bring a lot of benefits to the citizens and the traditions.
To conclude, every industry has their benefits and drawbacks. But in the case of touristry, traditions and culture gained more than what they’ve lost. So I have faith that by using culture as a money-making machine because it’ll benefit both sides, and help culture to reach their highest potential.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 536, Rule ID: CONTRACTED_FORM_NOT[1]
Message: You used a negation after a negated contracted verb. Did you mean simply 'can’t'?
Suggestion: can’t
...e buys those paintings anymore, so they can’t not pursuit their passion for a living. Tha...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, for example, in general, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9620596206 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67500678741 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552845528455 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8342601966 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3684210526 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4210526316 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26315789474 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25242976418 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709105772171 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637241825571 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161535497187 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733499519361 0.056905535591 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 536, Rule ID: CONTRACTED_FORM_NOT[1]
Message: You used a negation after a negated contracted verb. Did you mean simply 'can’t'?
Suggestion: can’t
...e buys those paintings anymore, so they can’t not pursuit their passion for a living. Tha...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, for example, in general, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9620596206 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67500678741 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552845528455 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8342601966 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3684210526 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4210526316 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26315789474 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25242976418 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709105772171 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637241825571 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161535497187 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733499519361 0.056905535591 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.