It is increasingly common that celebrities and sport stars promote international charitable event. While Some taught that they do it to popularize those event, Others think this action, Consequently, led to public stigma, That it is no longer an urgent to support those event.In this essay, I will discuss both contradicting statement using current evidence that support it.
On one hand, Celebrities control the supportive power of their fans. Celebrities are considered as a role model for societies, Because they are regarded as an example of successful person. Thus, Large percentage of fans will mimic the movement of a certain popular figure. everything they do in their daily life are constantly being copied by their followers. Furthermore, If they give inspirational lecture on the public eye, Consequently, their fan-base from all over the world will follow that trend and will promote that message even further to their relatives. Although, plenty of famous people promote violence and anti-christian movement, and their fans tends to follow them cluelessly, there are still some who survive and actually impact the world positively. Popular figure must protect and give a good trend to their fan-base , Because their action will be imitated by their followers.
On the other hand, The presence of famous figure tend to make public refuse to care. The majority think that the support of famous artist are ample for the charity organization, because most of artist donate humongous amount of money into the co-operation. Otherwisely, they only donate their verbal contribution towards the organization rather than donating their private wealth. It often led to the failure of a charity because public refuse to donate their's to the organization. A research that is conducted on a private charitable organization that help starving peasants in africa stated that their income decline significantly after a campaign was conducted by several celebrities. Therefore, Not all monetary fund of a charity could be solved by inviting and persuade star figure to promote your charity.
To conclude, Despite good intention from famous figures, public often respond to a different perception than the prior intention. Therefore, before you launch a campaign about a charity event, One must consider every single aspect of risk regarding the effect of the campaign itself.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this event' or 'those events'?
Suggestion: this event; those events
...me taught that they do it to popularize those event, Others think this action, Consequently...
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Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this event' or 'those events'?
Suggestion: this event; those events
...at it is no longer an urgent to support those event.In this essay, I will discuss both cont...
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Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...longer an urgent to support those event.In this essay, I will discuss both contrad...
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Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Everything
...e movement of a certain popular figure. everything they do in their daily life are constan...
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Line 3, column 837, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... and give a good trend to their fan-base , Because their action will be imitated b...
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Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...ake public refuse to care. The majority think that the support of famous artist are a...
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Line 5, column 483, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: Research
...e to donate theirs to the organization. A research that is conducted on a private charitab...
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Line 5, column 559, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to starve' or 'starve'.
Suggestion: to starve; starve
...ivate charitable organization that help starving peasants in africa stated that their in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, furthermore, if, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2008.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41239892183 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86726030201 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566037735849 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6418980657 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.117647059 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157056530038 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466492517921 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458197831742 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0906991389251 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038177797454 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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