Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police force or military force, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police force or military force, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion

As we are living in an egalitarian society, in which everyone has the same rights and the same opportunities, I think that women should contribute to the national police and military force as the men, but it should not be compulsory.
Military service is a mandatory duty of all male citizens in order to protect the country. However, many women are available to join the military force for several reasons. First, they want to prove that not only men but also women can lend a helping hand to keep social stability as well as prevent the threats from the outside. The history has also shown that women play a significant role as men in wars. For example, they are the nurses and doctors who heal the soldiers in time or liaison people who keep contact between units. Second, the participation in the army of the female is the symbol of the equality of society because it closes the gap of between two sexes in terms of the importance of national security.
Notwithstanding, I suppose that joining the army or police should be done voluntarily. This is partly due to that the country is not always in war or chaos conditions. Therefore, it would require a certain number of people in each military unit which needs only some female soldiers. Besides, if the women are forced to fulfill the military duty, it will delay the reproduction period that sometimes appears to be not good for both mothers and babies.
In conclusion, the contribution of the women to the military and police force is essential and appreciated, but it should depend on their willingness.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... same rights and the same opportunities, I think that women should contribute to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, i suppose, i think, in conclusion, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1295.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76102941176 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70851604166 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555147058824 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4079883215 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.916666667 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5833333333 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307491814697 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999598229201 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661346743131 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183548868518 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0145630840444 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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