In the modern era, with the expansion of entertainment, teenagers are now paying more attention to their favourite singers or movie stars, which overshadowed the paramount importance of learning history or gaining knowledge about their heroes in the past specifically. In this essay, I would scrutinize the reason behind this phenomenon and suggest some solutions for it.
A wide range of factors could contribute to this common circumstance of youngsters who, albeit versed in international celebrities, have superficial knowledge about famous historical figures of their own nations. The massive media coverage of famous stars could be the chief rational to explain this. With the popularity of social media, it is ubiquitous for teenagers, who spend most of their free time surfing the Internet, to come across a bulk of dynamic and vibrant images of celebrities all over the news headlines. Hence, it would raise teenagers’ interest in such topics and further create a rising trend among them. On the smaller scale of students particularly, in some exam-oriented countries like Vietnam, history is only regarded as secondary in the educational systems. Teenagers would have a tendency of focusing on their targeted subject, consequently, the young could turn down to have a vague understanding about their national history and national past heroes.
However, we are able to handle this situation by adopting several solutions. In order to place more emphasis on history, the educational authority would be well-advised to render it as a compulsory subject in most of our exams such as the national university entrance examinations. Under a certain pressure, students would investigate their time studying historical events which might be able to cultivate the learner's passion for history. Or perhaps, changing the whole school curriculum could be arduous, it is possible for teachers to make history lessons become more vibrant and easier to approach by adding joyful activities, such as play roles and go sightseeing in the museums… Regarding the media coverage, the film-makers should put more effort to improve the quality of films that honor the glorious victories with the aim of stimulating children’s and adolescents’ curiosity in learning about the figure behind these events.
To sum up, teenagers tend to pay more attention to international celebrities instead of their nation's heroes mostly due to social media and education. Therefore, several solutions should be taken to tackle such scenarios.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, however, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 41.998997996 162% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2144.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 390.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49743589744 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01396704862 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589743589744 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 106.732953999 49.4020404114 216% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 153.142857143 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8571428571 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92857142857 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23133185817 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072728072438 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489446841726 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139861345041 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498640346993 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.08 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 78.4519038076 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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