Some people believe that young people know about international pop and movie stars but know very less about famous people from the history in their own country. Why is this? How can more interest be created in young people to gain more knowledge about their own famous people from history?
It has been believed that young people pays more attention to international pop and movie stars than renown people from the history of their own countries. There are some reasons why this is the case, and some measures should be taken to help young people gain more knowledge about historical figures of their nations.
There are several reasons why the youth find more exciting to know international celebrities. Firstly, the entertainment industry of some countries is globally dominant and extremely successful, which makes worldwide people especially the younger become loyal audiences of their products. As a result, stars of these programs have become widely well-known. For example, Hollywood blockbusters like ‘Avatar’ have boosted the names of some actresses and actors including Zoe Saldana, Michelle Rodriguez, Stephen Lang. Regarding the reason why younger people have little information about people who had great contribution to their own countries, the fact is that the documentary about these people seems to less appeal to the young generation. For example, at school, students often find history subject boring when they have to be provided with too much events and figures.
Some feasible solutions could be used to help the younger pay more interest to the above respectable people. The first measure would be to rebuild the school curriculum, which makes history subject become an interesting topic for all students. For example, teachers should use visualization tools to create their historical lessons. By watching video clips about battles or interesting documentary film rather than just listening to historical events, students could comprehend their history better. The second approach is that historical and cultural attractions should be made more attractive to local residents, especially juveniles, adolescents, or teenagers. Graphic design should be used in film production to tell the story of history and representing these films in historical locations is an effective way to convey historical knowledge to the youngster.
In conclusion, I believe that every effort should be made to provide younger people with historical knowledge of their own countries as well as to help them show more respect to their national heroes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, regarding, second, so, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55043227666 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83487077109 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564841498559 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4315203431 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.4 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1333333333 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.458620851948 0.244688304435 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145591361838 0.084324248473 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140732236421 0.0667982634062 211% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.316515690268 0.151304729494 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.167314301763 0.056905535591 294% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.